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« on: July 29, 2010, 08:13:35 AM »

I know something is up with my pieces being passive. My editor agrees, he told me to figure it out. So that's why I am here today!  Tongue I could use a list of examples of what is passive and what is active. Maybe even a guide!
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« Reply #1 on: July 29, 2010, 11:42:24 AM »

If I understand correctly, you mean what is the active voice and what is the passive voice?

Passive: The coffee machine is broken.
Active: Joe broke the coffee machine.

Passive: The 25$ million jackpot has been won.
Active: A couple from rural New York won the $25 million jackpot.

Passive: A new stadium is being built downtown.
Active: The city is building a new stadium downtown. (financed by the taxpayers  Wink)

Passive is used when you don't know who did the action, you don't want to say who did the action, or it doesn't matter who did the action. It is more commonly used in journalism than fiction, which is why your editor probably told you to figure it out. But it depends, of course, on what you want (or don't want) to say.
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« Reply #2 on: July 29, 2010, 12:39:41 PM »

That is mostly correct. Passive voice is when the object of the action is the grammatical subject of the sentence. This is whether the subject of the action is present or not. James's examples are all good, but also consider:

The wall was painted by the graffiti artist.
We know who painted the wall, but the sentence is still passive.
The subject of the sentence is the wall, but the wall isn't acting, it's being acted upon.

It's a somewhat convoluted distinction to make or explain, however, it is very easy to spot when it is used:

Passive voice = "to be verb" + past participle.

Using James's examples:
1) The coffee machine "is" broken.

2) The 25$ million jackpot "has been" won.

3) A new stadium "is being" built downtown.
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« Reply #3 on: July 29, 2010, 01:39:53 PM »

Well spotted XyZy, and the one I missed pointing out is probably the one that is most often mistakenly used instead of the active. So much easier to say: The graffiti artist painted the wall.
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« Reply #4 on: July 29, 2010, 02:39:14 PM »

You have been agreed with.  The passive voice should be sought out whenever possible.  Things can seem complacent when it is used.  A passive voice sounds boring and droll. (all passive voice)

The active voice is much better though.  All of your nouns are busy doing something, moving the action forward.  An active sentence brings motion to a story. (all active voice)

There is something to be said for appropriate use of the passive voice, however.  Sometimes, you want to move your subject to the end of the sentence in order to have a greater impact on the reader.  I think that's where much of your passive voice comes from.  It's fine when used lightly, but repetitive or constant use is generally discouraged. 

(last sentence: passive voice)
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